Horses
Published by GHC • Jan 22nd, 2011 • Category: Critique Me!, PoetryHORSES is a submission for Critique Me!, an event where Girls Horse Club writers are inviting readers to critique their stories and poems with praise and/or constructive advice intended to help build confidence and improve writing/storytelling skills. Thanks in advance for your thoughtful insight!
by Geneva, age 7
Horse are the light of the world.
Horses make me smile, luckily I have my own.
They make me smile, they make me happy.
Riding like a cowboy, I will ride away on my horse’s back.
Trotting, galloping and jumping away,
And that is the end of my fantastic day.
Your right horses do make a day fantastic!
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Very cute poem Geneva! =) You know I think it would make a more personal poem if you were to put “Horses are the light of MY world” in the first line. and are you a cowgirl or a cowboy? Because if you’re a gal it would make the poem better by saying “riding like a cowgirl”
your poem made me smile! =)
HF
: ) Great poem… and completely true too!
♥LA
A charming poem, and I know we can all relate to feeling like that, which I think is what makes this so pleasant to read.
Such a sweet poem :] Horses do make the world brighter, don’t they?
i agree…. but remember that your a cowGIRL not a cowBOY… but other than that it was awesome!